Crossing the Line

Responding to Denise’s Six Sentence Challenge using the word Line..

Every evening ma would sit me on a stool, run her fingers lovingly through my hair, brushing with gentle downward strokes as she sipped from her bottle of Jack Daniels.

She would tell me about my daddy, “Your daddy was the devil incarnate, raped me at fourteen behind Jed’s liquor store, would have been alive today if yer grandma hadn’t found him with her shotgun.”

She would continue ranting and raging, till her anger abating she would return to brushing my hair with those gentle downwards strokes, ” You are my little angel, my little angel, think I’ll put a pink ribbon in your hair tomorrow, would you like that “

Mornings as ma struggled to dress and out the door to work, grandma would visit, arching her eyes while staring at me with that funny look, asking if she could fix me some eggs for breakfast.

There came a morning when grandma came over to cook me breakfast and ma was still in bed, so grandma went in the bedroom to wake her and came out with a sorrowful expression.

” Your ma’s dead, guess you’re with me now and first thing we gotta do is cut that hair and make you look more like the boy your ma never wanted, she crossed the line in raising you.”


Published by lensdailydiary

Born Stepney, London, England. Emigrated to Canada. Married, two children, six grandchildren. Retired. Conservative and cultural catholic. LOVE soccer. Tottenham Hotspur. Read historical and fantasy fiction..

35 thoughts on “Crossing the Line

      1. After this year, I doubt fiction will ever match the insane reality we’re walking through currently. I don’t know how people without faith in God are managing–mine is getting stretched weekly 🙂


  1. A gritty six. Thank goodness Grandma is there. I wonder how the kid felt getting that haircut finally? Maybe he liked the hair, and even though Grandma has the best intentions, he might miss it. Or maybe it’s the ‘clean slate’ he needs.


  2. Hi, Len, I’m not sure about Grandma, either. I think we’re going to have a story about three troubled souls. This is compelling narrative, though, no doubt about it. Highly, effectively crafted. If there were more, I’d be sad though wouldn’t mind.


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